Monday, March 22, 2010

Text Production Essay #1

Natural greenhouse effect supports life on Earth as greenhouse gases trap sun-rays and re-radiate them back to provide the planet warmth. Nonetheless, human activities have increased their concentration, trapping more heat from sun-rays and global warming ensued. Since Ice Age, global temperature has risen by 5°C whereby around 84 percent is contributed by recent decades. Scientists claim that higher temperature will alter world climate. Food for thought, traditional climate change warms up or cools down the whole planet while the modern one has similar but irregular effects. This makes the living on Earth struggled. Thus, the potential complications of global warming should be clarified and arrested.

The potential effects of global warming in terms of climate change include the extinction of flora and fauna. Climate change triggers glacial accumulation in some areas while reduction in elsewhere. It warms the Polar Regions faster too. According to Arctic Climate Impact Assessment (ACIA), Arctic has lost approximately 8 percent of its sea ice over the last three decades and will become denuded in summer by 2100. Its disappearance can jeopardize the polar creatures and migratory birds which fly there for reproduction purpose. Coral reefs which serve as the base of ecosystems will be destroyed by increasing temperature of the oceans. The extinction of 30-40 percent of global species due to climate change has been foreshadowed.

More unprecedented and severe disasters can also be resulted from global warming. Climate change alters the rainfall of a region (Chris, 2006). More rainfall can be observed in the areas having wet weather and located high above the sea level. However, it is not the frequency that increases but the magnitude (Holli, 2007). Furthermore, the frequency and severity of disasters such as El-NiƱo, storms and heat waves have also increased (Chris, 2006). This is evidenced by the reports conducted by Intergovernmental Panel on Climate Change (IPCC) over half of the past century (Holli, 2007).

Besides that, global warming can also affect the welfare of the people. Climate change induces unpredictable and exceptional weather. When there is more rainfall in some places, there are longer-lasting droughts (Chris, 2006) assaulting other places. This scenario will further limit the source of nutrients. Global warming shifts the growing season too. Earlier spring forces migratory species to prey their food earlier. Meanwhile, shorter-lasting winter is unable to destroy bugs which can overrun an ecosystem. Besides that, vectors can reach greater range of places due to climate change (Holli, 2007) as more places have their temperatures increased.

To tackle the impacts of climate change, emissions of greenhouse gases should be reduced. Consumers should purchase energy-efficient appliances and request for more proportion of household electricity to be generated from renewable energy. Usage of self-transport should be reduced. While driving own vehicles, ‘drive with better fuel economy in mind’ (Chris, 2006). On the other hand, Nzone Tonight’s Climate Change – has it been cancelled? U-Tube video suggests the world to compromise with climate change and accept it like any other natural disasters as the former is also part of the nature. According to the video, the needy should be given assistance at the same time.

In conclusion, each of us has the obligation in arresting climate change caused by global warming as we have contributed to the problem as stated in the film An Inconvenient Truth – a global warning (2007) directed by Davis Guggenheim. Based on the film, the warnings of the disaster must be acknowledged and given appropriate reactions. When the controversy regarding the seriousness of global warming is ongoing, the problem is worsening too. The Stern Report urges for instant investment in overcoming climate change as the longer it takes to defeat the problem, the higher the cost will be (Chris, 2006).

1 comment:

  1. 1. Is there a clear introductory sentence that introduces the subject matter and the controlling idea? What do you suggest for improvement if the introductory sentence is not clear?
    ~The introduction is clear and good. I think that using formation of global warming phenomenon as introduction is interesting and give us a clear image of how global warming is induced.

    2. Is there a thesis statement given as the last sentence of the introductory paragraph? Is it clear and connected to all the topic sentences of the body paragraphs?
    ~Yes. Thesis statement is stated well and connected to all the topic sentences of the body paragraph.

    3. Do the paragraphs have sufficient supporting details and examples? How can the organization be improved?
    ~The supporting details and examples are sufficient. The organization is fluent and well.

    4. Are there any paragraphs which are not supported well?
    ~ All the paragraphs are supported with affluent of points and examples.

    5. Are there any sentences or sections that are not clear? If so, how can they be improved?
    ~For second paragraph, “The potential effects of global warming in terms of climate change include the extinction of flora and fauna. Climate change triggers glacial accumulation………” it starts off by discussing about the effect of climate change on ecosystem and then the melting of glaciers. It is a bit inappropriate and not smooth.

    6. Does the conclusion summarize all the main points given in the essay or restate the ~thesis statement? Is it clear? If not, how can the writer improve this part?
    Yes. The conclusion does restate the thesis statement clearly.

    7. Does the writer cite the sources adequately and appropriately? Note any incorrect citation.
    ~The writer does cite the sources adequately and appropriately. All the citation is correct.

    8. Are there any apparent grammatical or spelling mistakes?
    ~No. After checking for several times, there is no grammatical or spelling mistake.

    9. Does the writer comprehensively cover appropriate materials available from the standard sources? If no, what is missing
    ~Yes. All the materials available are covered comprehensively from the standard resources.

    10. Additional comments:
    ~Nice organization and straight to the point. Besides, there is no grammatical or spelling mistake in the essay as well. Bravo!! I think you can use more sophisticated and fancy vocabulary in order to upgrade your essay. Overall, it’s definitely a piece of masterpiece and efforts had been put in.

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